Sunday, August 10, 2008

Rates of Exchange, Chapter 7


I decided to go outside and stretch my legs, get some fresh air. I took the stairs outside my room and crossed the courtyard. On a whim I walked through the lobby area, entering via a glass door that has stickers for various agencies giving approvals of Frank's efforts as a gracious host. It's amazing what credentials you can buy. If you have money.

I didn't see Frankie but the desk girl looked at me oddly and then looked away as if she hadn't seen me. The main doors were open and wedged and the cool morning air was freshening the lobby. I walked up to the desk and asked the girl if Frank was in. She stammered for a second and at first I thought of a speech impediment, but then I realized that she didn't know what to say. She eventually got out that Frank wasn't around today and wasn't taking calls anyway. I just looked at her for a second hoping that she would think about that last piece of information. She blushed and rearranged some papers on her desk. I thanked her and walked to the main doors and stood in the opening, in the shade of the breezeway but feeling the growing warmth of the air that would heave the day into the blaze of the sun by noon. I thought about going back for a jacket but changed my mind when a little Honda pulled in to a stall to my left. I turned to look at it and out of the corner of my eye I saw the desk girl looking at me out of the corner of her eye while she spoke quietly into the phone. She didn't have the cheery falseness that people who are speaking to customers have, just the forced deadpan of the amateur. She looked away from me and the terminator of the breezeway's shadow crept a little to the left. She sneaked a look back at me and shook her head as she spoke. I couldn't hear the words but I turned slightly so that I was looking more directly at her. She blushed and turned her back to me. I smiled, more inside than out, and turned back to the little Honda. Frank's daughter, Helen, fresh out of university, fresh out of her little car, looked at me and smiled. She was wearing jeans, a jean jacket over a dark blue blouse with what looked like a thousand tiny vines of grey flowers in the print. Her hair was dark, that kind of black that is almost blue.
She stopped in front of me.
I smiled back.

"Hi," she said.
"Hi," I said.
"It's a beautiful morning."
"Yeah. It is. No contest, though."
"Thank you. Um..."
"I was thinking about breakfast."
She paused. "What are we talking about here?"
"Protein, carbs, maybe some fat. Basic biology." I said.
"Oh," she said.
"There's a problem, though,"
"What's that?"
"I don't know what's good in town. Have you eaten yet?"
We still hadn't broken each other's gaze.
"My father says I should stay away from you."
When she said that, her head tilted slightly, to the side. Regarding.
"You always do what your daddy tells you?" I winked. "Come on, I'll buy you breakfast somewhere in public. It oughta reduce your risk."

She smiled. Toothy bright. I let my eyes fall to her mouth. Just for a second.

"I won," she said, smiling more now.
"What are we talking about here?"
"You'll see," she said as she took me by my arm and we started walking out of the parking lot.

The sun was in our eyes as we reached the road and turned left. Helen still had my arm and I liked that. I felt good muscle under her jean jacket as we walked.
I looked back at her car and happened to see Frank at the window of his office next to the lobby glass. Well, well. He was holding a phone to his ear and he put it down at the same time the desk girl put her phone down. Just before the angle blocked my view, the desk girl looked out the open doors and caught my eye. She turned around quickly and disappeared through the door to Frank's office. Frank shut his curtains. I continued down the street with his daughter on my arm.

4 Comments:

OpenID singleforareason said...

Hi, Shane! I love this photo, the texture, the angle, the pointy point of the shoe.

I have not read all the chapters so feel out of it to comment. But, I will anyway! In the dialogue part, when the flirting is going on, eyes locked, etc...and she says, "what is going on here?" I wondered, "Would she really say that if she was flirting?" Something about it took me out of the moment. Now, since my name is singleforareason maybe my flirting advice is suspect on the face of it, but when you reused it except this time coming out of his mouth a few lines later, it just sort of seemed manipulated instead of flowy.(now, there's an impressive word!)

I'll stop now. Does any of this make sense? Sigh.

August 15, 2008 8:22 PM  
Blogger Shane said...

Yes, what you say does make sense, Pat. Don't stop.

I would love to claim ownership of these people's words but I can't really go much further than "I think, therefore they are." The people, I mean, not the words. They say the things that they will given the situations they find themselves in. I have little or no control.

So, with regards to the issue of the 'out of the moment' part, I could plead an anxiety of influence by Parker or maybe Stout, but I must point out that Helen said the words, not I. As her character is more fully revealed, to me as well as to you, we may find out that she wasn't flirting with the protagonist at all. Or she was. Or he thought she was but she didn't intend to. Or she wasn't but he thought she was and she doesn't think that he does. Or something else again even subtler in potential misapprehension on their part. And so when she says "What are we talking about here?" (and I take your paraphrase using "going on" rather than "talking about" as being deliberate), she may mean "...going on..." - she's trying to scrye his meaning from the spoken words that lie between them. He's a man who is maybe 7 or 8 years her senior, and at her age (25-ish), is exotic - her father described him as a hazard of some type - but still within the realm of promise - he's living in her father's hotel and he is more hers than her father's. He has seen much more of the world than she and he spins her faux non-flirt back at her with a double entendre. A triple, actually. Safe, but with enough to arouse the promise of greater risk. And, he's trying to figure out... what? Whether something of a potential nature lies between them? Maybe.

He is witty enough to take something of hers and turn it back - partly by way of compliment, partly by way of invitation. She's still trying to figure out if they're flirting. I'm pretty sure he's manipulating, but what? And why?

Non of this answers your just criticism, I'm afraid. I may only have committed the sin of revealing my own inadequate analysis of their behavior: "What the hell are they doing now?!?!"
You asked, "Are you sure they would do this?"
My answer can only be, "I saw them do it. I wrote it down".

I thank you for the very nice words about the photograph. The pleasure is mine. I'm happy to have it shared.

August 16, 2008 12:22 AM  
Blogger Shane said...

Hmmm. After reading the above, I think I shouldn't drink and type.

Thanks Pat, I do take what you said seriously.

Shane

August 16, 2008 11:57 AM  
Anonymous celeste said...

I too think the angle of the shot is brilliant and "i think therefore, they are" a great way to look at ones musings. But what exactly are thoughts?...I once read that thoughts are just different radios stations we tune into.

Got the bit about the girl being 20something, but had imagined her as 21-22. Being 24-25 makes her potentially that much more dangerous, a girl on the cusp of womanhood, she could swing both ways, streetwise for having witnessed her dad for a quater of a century ( 2 ex-wives, his new informant secretary with a promisary rock on her finger, mistresses controlled by money, and been in his office and back parlor as he maneouvored his pawns)She now has an incling of her power as a woman, she consciously, not out of mere rebellion, defies her dad , but will she flex the full potential of her womanhood?...he's an invitation/opportunity to do so....and the guy 32-33, is a bit young for him, an average 32-33 yo man still has life by the tail, it hasn't yet turned around to bite him, to humble him...I had given him 42-45....but then again he too could have started early in the hard knocks school of life and although he might be 33, he is as vigilant/perceptive and on his guard as any well healed 48 yo.

...writing while under the influence....just enough to transcend one's internal censors...open enough to able to connect all the compartements life would have us limited/portionned into, an so yes why not on 2,3,4 levels, hell if there are truely 120 states of consciousness the options are limited only by ones own mind.

August 28, 2008 8:09 AM  

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